Madhumita stared at her daughter. She stared ceaselessly…like
there was no tomorrow.
She saw the preparations being made. She decided to sit
still and watch her little girl get ready. Strangely, even at 28, daughters are little
girls for their mothers.
Madhumita’s sister draped the saree. The blood red silk
with its thick golden border dazzled. (Every time Madhumita would help her daughter wear
a saree, she would complain, “Ma, I am looking so fat! Look at the
pleats, Ma! You don’t know anything. Mashi does it so much better”. ) This
time, Madhumita obliged and let her sister do it.
Once the saree was draped, one of her cousins brought a
bowl of sandalwood paste. Little dots of chandan were put on the two
sides of the red bindi, around the curves of the eyebrows. The sight of her daughter’s
forehead transported Madhumita to days when the daughter was five or six. She
would take her mother’s dupatta, drape it like a saree, make a paste
with talcum powder and water and with the butt of a match stick, she would put
white dots on her forehead. Decking up like a bride was her favourite game which
gave way to “teacher-teacher” once she grew up a little. (Madhumita also remembered
how her daughter drooled over her lipsticks. Since she was not allowed to use
them, the naughty little girl would ask her mother to kiss her on the lips so
that a tinge of colour could pass onto her baby lips too. She wanted to consume
paan for the very same reason. Her daughter loved red lips.)
Once the chandan was done, one of the relatives
got alta and started putting the red liquid on the circumference of her daughter’s
feet. On normal occasions, her daughter
would jump and shriek at the tickle, but today, she was a quiet, well behaved ‘lokkhi
meye’.
Her daughter was all decked up and ready to leave. A
big Rajanigandha garland was put around her neck, adding to the finishing
touch.
Madhumita could hear someone asking, “Has everyone arrived?
It’s getting late. We must start now.” Her brother pointed out that the packet
of khhoi (popped rice) was missing. One of the relatives arranged for it
quickly.
It was all set.
The big white vehicle was waiting outside their gate.
The daughter was escorted by flocks of relatives.
The engine ignited and the car started moving. Her
daughter was finally leaving.
Madhumita stared at her daughter. She stared ceaselessly…like
there was no tomorrow.
Her son-in-law pulled Madhumita close and she plunged
into an unfathomable tornado of tears and tremours. Her vision blurred. All she
could hear was the sound “Bolo hori hori bol” as the white vehicle
carrying her daughter headed towards the crematorium.
You were born with the gift to leave a void in the hearts of people like me. Keep writing, kid.
ReplyDeleteThanks, if what you wrote is a compliment.
DeleteKyno likhli? Bhalo likhechhish.... maane lekha hishbe khub bhaloi hoyechhe hoyto... aar tachhara eta TOR Potpourri, tor jaa ichche tui likhteii parish -ami bolbar ke? kintu... tobu...
ReplyDeleteTrue, it's your potpourri, Parama ... but it's a potpourri "of all things bright and beautiful" ...
Bhalo Lekha...
I agree with you. My space is about all things bright and beautiful. This comes as an exception. It was sudden and I decided to pen it down. Thanks for the honest feedback. (PS: Mon bhalo nei. Phone korish)
DeleteChokher jol muchchi.
ReplyDeletereally not what i wanted to read first thing in the morning...cant help but say that its brilliant. but made me say 'why did you have to do that in the end?' very touching!
ReplyDeleteThank you Sunil. Sorry for such the end. But that's how it flowed. :(
DeleteDitto the comment above. Didn't want to read this first thing in the morning. It is heart wrenching. Period.
ReplyDeleteConsider publishing, Parama. Seriously.
Coming from you, it is a huuuge compliment, Thanks a lot. Hugs.
DeleteWish I didn't have to read the end. Wonderfully written and very touching!
ReplyDeleteWelcome to my blog, A. Hope to see you here more often. Also, thanks a ton for reading.
DeleteI had a smile while reading it.... until I reached the last line.. i suddenly felt numb. Thats the power of this writing. brilliant work :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Apala. :)
DeleteMade me cry n run for cover in office!! Khub shundor likhecho... bt its so heart wrenching!!
ReplyDelete:(
Deleteshundor lekhen apni. khub koshto holo pore, khub bhalo-o laglo.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Ms. Kanjilal. I read your blog regularly and totally love it. Welcome to my blog. (Please amay "apni" bolo na)
DeleteBhalo na mane darun mane baje mane superb... Mane kano eshob lekha? Do not want this from you...please
ReplyDeletePagli! :) Achha, ar likhbo na erom. Shanti?
Delete"But what sense of hope or satisfaction could a reader derive from an ending like that? So in the book, I wanted to give Robbie and Cecilia what they lost out on in life. I'd like to think this isn't weakness or... evasion... but a final act of kindness. I gave them their happiness."
ReplyDeleteI normally follow Abhishek da's blog sometimes and from his posts came across this piece today. Again, I was reminded of that story where he wrote about a boy and a dog and the ending was not a very happy one. I do understand that art encompasses torment to a great extent. In fact, I won't disagree to the notion that torment and sadness moulds and beautifies art. However, as we have enough sadness in this world for one lifetime, it's an earnest request from me to you to continue writing pieces which provide satisfaction and joy, even though its momentary. Since you write well, I believe my request won't go down as a total waste. :)
Thank you. Sorry, if the heap of words were overbearing.
Thank you Sambudhha. Thank you for visiting the blog and your comment. See, generally I write about happy things. Infact except for this one, ALL my posts are happy. This one is an exception. :)
DeleteI know the rest of your posts are happy. I have read a few of them. Hence I tried to use the phrase "continue writing pieces of joy" judiciously. :)
Deletethanks again re. hope to see you here more often :)
DeleteAlthough, I guessed the ending when I read the first few lines, beautiful writing. However, a tad too tragic.
ReplyDeleteThank you Priyanka...for reading. (PS: What a strange coincidence! Your mother's name is Madhumita!)
Deletekal kei porechilam ... mon bhaar ... besh dhakka legechhilo
ReplyDeletejibon ta erokomi unexpected ... tai tumi boro shottyi likhechho
lekha hisebe besh, tomar pattern follow koreo kintu eibar besh notun
koshto holo bt aeto ta real bolei bolbo r o lekho, r erokom o lekho
thank you. tomar bhalo legeche jene amaro khub bhalo laglo. bhalo thako. :)
DeleteI liked the way you right. Mostly happy and chirpy.
ReplyDeletethank you so much.
DeleteI was thinking more along the lines of 'leaving baaper bari for shoshurbari' type of farewell :( May be because I went through one recently.... Touching and unexpectedly sad.
ReplyDeleteThanks. Hugs.
Delete:(
ReplyDelete:)
DeleteOMG, you are really talented.
ReplyDeleteOMG! Thanks! :D
DeleteTumi erom keno likhle? tomar toh erom lekhar kotha chhilona... durr..mon ta bhison kharap hoye gelo.
ReplyDeleteHere's a confession to make - I keep coming to your blog for an essence of Bengal. Barir theke eto dur e eshe Banglar dwigun prem e porechi. R tomar chokh diye taake arro ruposhi lage.
I hope you know how powerful your write ups are. This is beautiful, but in a sad way.
Thank you Marina for all the wonderful words. I keep on writing on happy things....tai bhablam ekta change dorkar :D
DeleteI knew the end of the story as soon as begun reading it. :(
ReplyDeleteJyoti