Monday, 27 May 2013

The break up


“I ‘m sorry”, the Doctor surrendered.

Nurses started dismantling the life support. He waited breathlessly for the heartbeat graph to fall flat. Finally, she would be all his.

She saw her tall dark man. She had spent sleepless nights with him, crying, confronting, judging if their relationship would ever work out. It was hatred to begin with. But slowly, she started trusting him. She knew he could provide her with peace like none other.

Whilst she was preparing to move out of the hospital with him, she heard a deep male voice calling her name.

She started breathing again, while Death stood there watching their four years of courtship collapse.     


17 comments:

  1. I think this is a brilliant story, and is good enough to win the contest.

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    1. Coming from you, well, I am happy already! Doesn't matter if I win or LOOSE. :D

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    2. loose??????

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    3. Abhijeet, it is a private joke that Mr. Mukherjee and I share :D

      In case you want to read this one: http://ovshake.blogspot.in/2013/02/the-error.html

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  2. excellent, Parama. one of the best entries i've dug my eyes onto for this contest. why don't you write more fiction? :-)

    ~ Best,

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    1. How sweet is that! Thank you so much. Gives me a lot of moral boost!

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  3. excellent, Parama. one of the best entries i've dug my eyes onto for this contest. why don't you consider writing more fiction? :-)

    ~ Best,

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  4. A wonderful read.
    Thoughtful.
    Deep.
    As deep as the sound that brought her back from her tall dark man.
    :)
    Write on..
    Bans

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  5. Nice one! I would like to vote for you. :)

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    1. Yay!!! So happy I am. Thank you, Supriya. Thanks a ton.

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